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« on: July 06, 2010, 03:38:34 pm » |
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Since we're all probably going to be wantng feedback and creating multiple threads I figured why not just have one master thread for everyone to use.
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I enjoyed it. It was well written, but at times it seemed a little all over the place. I'm not sure the end fit in with the overall feel of the rp. But maybe that's what you were going for.
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« Reply #1 on: July 06, 2010, 08:36:05 pm » |
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Thats exactly what I was going for actually. What happened at the end was meant to contradict everything I had said about myself and the mood I tried to set during the entire promo. Thanks for the feedback though man appreciated.
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« Reply #2 on: July 06, 2010, 08:43:12 pm » |
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Ahrima-Good read but make sure ur checking wat words ur using from what i remember u used fell instead of feel and punched instead of punches make sure to double check that
Wildcard-very good read as usual but i have to agree with MDE the ending seemed out of place but as u said thats what you wanted
Nick Riot-i really didnt understand your rp at all it seemed very out of place but thats jsut my opinion the whole letter thing and stuff i know your trying to give a background look at who you are and where you came from it just didnt stick with me maybe if linked it more to whats goin on now it would have stuck more but again its just my opinion of it and others may ha e loved it
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« Reply #3 on: July 07, 2010, 01:48:48 am » |
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Nick Riot-i really didnt understand your rp at all it seemed very out of place but thats jsut my opinion the whole letter thing and stuff i know your trying to give a background look at who you are and where you came from it just didnt stick with me maybe if linked it more to whats goin on now it would have stuck more but again its just my opinion of it and others may ha e loved it
Alot of that RP dealt with what had happened with Nick Riot during his final UWE days before we took the break. Maybe that's why you don't understand it, though. I'm not sure you were around when a lot of that stuff in the RP had happened. Either way, it was practically linking what happened during UWE's break, to now. Thanks for the feedback though man
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« Reply #4 on: July 07, 2010, 02:44:48 am » |
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Ahrima-Good read but make sure ur checking wat words ur using from what i remember u used fell instead of feel and punched instead of punches make sure to double check that
Just thought I'd repost that, not for truth but for lulz.
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« Reply #5 on: July 07, 2010, 03:35:19 am » |
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You sir, are an evil man.
Who: Gotta' be honest, the whole Spanish translation thing was...Well, I guess just interesting. It wasn't bad, or anything like that. Just...Yeah. Either way, (And, maybe just me) but maybe your RP should've been longer, giving your opponent things to really feed off of. Just a thought.
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« Reply #6 on: July 07, 2010, 04:36:39 am » |
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The who: I wish yours would have been longer. Not to give me anything to feed off I just would have liked to see some backstory to your character man. Who is he? Whos the girl? The translation thing didn't bother me that much. I played it off I think.
Callos: You know your my boy. But the Arkham Asylum? Really? I mean I could see Baine doing that...I don't know. I would have rather you gone a different rout. Have you be locked up in a security ward. Do a hannibal type thing. I don't know. So many possibilities that come to my mind for that. Hit me up sometime if you want to bounce ideas back and forth my man.
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« Reply #7 on: July 07, 2010, 04:45:45 am » |
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yeah i froze on a name and thats the first that popped into my head plus the additions of Hal Jordan (Green Lantern) and Wade Wilson (Deadpool) jsut became fun little easter eggs if you will for my rp I do like the security ward idea maybe i'll figure out a way to get that into my story soon we will see and bro good read i like the new jamie stevens its intriguing i like it
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« Reply #8 on: July 07, 2010, 06:34:24 am » |
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MDE, your rp just rocked my effing World. Just thought you should know.
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« Reply #9 on: July 07, 2010, 03:30:20 pm » |
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The point to the first one was the simple “we are here, we mean business” sort of deal, hopefully as this goes one firstly they understand more English, secondly they go into back story, the whole language thing right now is they understand each other while not speaking their language and have the whole language barrier problem.
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Callos: You know your my boy. But the Arkham Asylum? Really? I mean I could see Baine doing that...I don't know.
Haha Nice Okay so I just posted my rp up and I know its short. But its okay. It's been a while since I actually typed up a real good one. Anyway, I say it's okay because I wanted to keep it short and simple. Hope you guys enjoy it.
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Just wondering how my first RP in 3 years went over?
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My first one is up...short, but was a bit limited by time restraints here in Iraq lol.
So far i've enjoyed reading all the other RP's this week. MDE, top notch work as usual. Didn't miss a beat man! Welcome back.
I'll give some more feedback as i get more time...and as always welcome it on this end too. Hoping i get more time when it comes to my second RP; know I'm going to need to do a lot better to pull off a win against Blaze!
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X, I don't know why, but I loved your RP.
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